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Friday, October 4, 2013

Lee's Island, Part 2

More drudged-up fan fiction for those who weren't scared off by the first instalment.

In which most pieces of dialogue could be said by anyone and an authentically Japanese name is revealed:

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    "Hey, guys, look who I found."
    "My gosh, everyone's here!"
    "Uh, what's going on? Ooh, cool! Food!" He grabbed the last fish and started eating.
    "Ugh. Yep, that's Naruto." Sakura sighed. "Great."
    "Oh! Hi Sakura!" Naruto said. "Hey, you got any more fish?"
    "Nope. Not unless you get it yourself." TenTen said.
    "Darn it!" Naruto said.
    "Well, I guess since you're here, you can help us build our shack." 
    "Um, okay. What do I need to do?"
    "Hmm, we could probably use a lot of help, so why don't you make some shadow clones?" 
    "Okay," Naruto said, making three hand signs. "Shadow Clone Jutsu!" and instantly, five more Narutos appeared. "You two can figure out a way to find out where we are or something. The Narutos and I will build the shack."
    "Sounds good to me." TenTen said.
    "Okay, Naruto, I have already started. Follow me." said Rock Lee. 
    "Okay." said a Naruto. Rock Lee walked towards the skeleton of the hut. 
    "Geez, is that all you have?" one Naruto said. 
    "Well, I just started a minute ago!"
    "Okay, whatever. What do we do?"
"I have the basic structure made, so all we need to do is cover it up. I have some leaves to do just that." He pointed to the giant leaves. 
    "Okay, how do we stick them to the branches?" said a Naruto. 
    "Oh, yeah. We need to find some kelp, too. Let us go to the shore." Lee said. Rock Lee and the gaggle of Narutos headed to the shore to find some kelp. They gathered some and ran back to the hut's skeleton. 
    "Okay, let's go." They strapped together the leaves and the branches to make the hut. When they had finished, they walked around looking for some cushiony leaves and such for everyone to sleep on. 
    "Hey, I think I found some! Believe it!" Naruto, whose clones were gone, yelled. 
    "One sec!" Lee shouted, starting to run towards the source of Naruto's voice. He got there and felt the big leaves that Naruto had found and said, "Yeah, these will be great! Let us get a few and head back to camp." 
    "Uh, camp?"
    "Where the shack is."
    "Oh, okay. Let's go, believe it!" They picked the softest leaves and ran back to the hut. When the boys got there, TenTen and Sakura weren't there.
    "I guess they are not back yet." They looked around for a little while. The fire was out and the moon was high in the sky. Then they heard a scream. Sakura's scream. "Sakura!" they yelled in unison. Both ninja ran towards the sound.
A little later, they finally found TenTen and Sakura. Sakura was lying motionless on the ground, blood everywhere. TenTen was also down, but with less wounds. 
    "Oh, no!" said Lee. "Sakura! Are you okay?" Lee knelt down and put two fingers on Sakura's neck. No pulse. 
    "Sakura! Naruto, she-she doesn't have a pulse. This is serious!" 
    "No! Sakura! Wha-what do we do?"
    "Do you know any healing justu?"
    "No. Do you think she'll be okay?"
    "Unless some miracle happens," Lee said, with a gulp, "she won't make it." Naruto gasped.
    "Well, l-I will go ahead an-and s-see if TenTen's okay." He walked over to TenTen and laid his fingers on her neck. "It looks like TenTen made it. I just wish Sakura-" He stopped, weeping hopelessly.
"I can help you," said a faint voice from nowhere.
    "Wha? Who's there?"
    "Oh, no one really, just someone who can heal anything." The mystery girl's words hung in the air for but an instant.
    "Please, heal Sakura!"
    "If you wish," said the girl. "But I will need a favor."
    "Anything, just heal Sakura!"
    "As you wish." Suddenly, the girl appeared. She was another ninja, but she wasn't from the Village Hidden in the Leaves, as the others were. She was from the Village Hidden in the Mountains, as her headband indicated. Her hair was brown with white streaks, and her eyes were bright orange. She had black shorts and a black shirt with netting at the ends. She walked up to Sakura and made several hand signs. "Spirit Heal Jutsu!" She said, putting her hand on Sakura's chest. She pushed down quickly, and a ring of chakra emnated from her hand onto Sakura. The girl stood up and said, "There you are. Now are you ready to do your favor?" Lee said, "But how do we know you healed Sakura?" 
    "Check her pulse, check her breathing, check whatever you like, and you will find that she is healed." And so Lee walked up to Sakura and put his fingers on her neck as before. "You did it!" He said with exitement. "You brought her back!" 
    "But may I remind you that everything comes with a price," said the girl. "You promised me a favor if I healed her."
    "Okay, okay, what do you want?" Naruto asked. "Nothing much," said the girl, "Just a little of each person's blood on this senbon."
    "Wha?" Naruto said. 
    "Don't worry, all I have to do is poke you with this." She walked up to Naruto and poked part of his arm with the senbon, just enough to make it bleed. She walked over and pricked Rock Lee with the senbon, exactly as before but in his left leg. Then she kneeled down and poked Sakura in the chest. She walked over to TenTen and stabbed her in the side. "My work here is done," she said. The girl made four hand signs, yelled,"Sprinting in the Mist Justu!" and disappeared.
"Huh, I wonder what that was about?" Naruto said.
    "Who knows? I am just glad Sakura is back!" Lee said. A second later, Sakura arose. "Ugh. I feel like I just got hit by a Demon Wind shuriken." 
    "What happened, anyway?" Lee asked.
    "I don't know. It all happened so fast. We were exploring when someone, or something, attacked us. I blacked out, and here I am. I think I almost died." 
    "Actually, you did. There was a girl that came by and brought you back. Then she pricked all of us and ran off, believe it." TenTen, who had also risen, gasped. 
    "What did she look like?" she asked, her voice hard and trembling. 
    "Um, let's see, she was from the Village Hidden in the Mountains, she was wearing black, and her hair was brown, but with white streaks." Naruto said. 
    "Oh, no." 
    "What?"
    "That girl is not a normal ninja. She's a descendant of the Undinasha clan."
    "So what?"
    "The Undinashas don't have their own chakra network. They take chakra from others."
    "How?"
    "If she causes a person to bleed, she gets full access to that person's chakra." she said, her voice harder than before. The other three gasped. 
    "So you mean that she can take all of our chakra if she wants to?!" Lee said, his eyes wide with fear. TenTen gulped. "Exactly." 
    Well, that sucks, Sakura thought. Cha
Suddenly, Lee fell to the ground, gripping his leg and shouting with anguish. 
    "Lee!" Sakura shouted. 
    "It's happening already. She will devour our chakra until we die," TenTen said, her voice tinged with fear. Lee screamed again, a bloodcurdling scream. 
    "Lee," Sakura said, her hands tensed. Rock Lee was now laying motionless on the sand. 
    "Get ready, everyone. We're next." Sakura was the next shinobi to lie motionless on the sand. Then Naruto. Then TenTen. 

2 comments:

  1. Of course, the first thing Naruto notices/cares about is food XD

    For some reason the sentence "The Narutos and I will build the shack" struck me as particularly funny. I just like how he refers to his clones as "the Narutos" instead of "we" (or maybe he actually does that in the show? XD I haven't watched much of it, although I know who all the characters are).

    You actually didn't overuse Believe It like lots of authors do. XD Twice in a chapter isn't particularly excessive.

    Run! It's a Mary Sue!

    Maybe not - if she wants everything to come with a price, she's probably a bad guy...

    Oh no! I knew there was something wrong with that girl! D:

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    1. We'll see if "Believe it!" becomes a problem later. Of course, it's overused in canon, so...

      Bad guys can be Mary Sues, too XD

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