Clocking in at 239 of 250 allowed words, we have:
The zombie apocalypse was years ago—old hat. Besides, there’s
a cure and plenty of bullets yet to take care of the rotting stragglers.
No, the threats these days are the survivors.
Charlotte Heiman has finally achieved a stable life in the
walled remains of Killeen as a zombie hunter, but she can’t stay any longer.
She hasn’t seen her little brother Blake since her family dropped him off at camp
that fateful summer, and now that she has the supplies, she’s headed his way.
Arthur Deering has finally achieved a stable life in a rural
home with no companions but his bow and arrows. He has long since come to
believe that he’s the only man alive—so it comes as quite a shock when
Charlotte finds him. Quite an infatuating shock, as a matter of fact.
Although Arthur turns out to be much more of a suitor than a
menace, he’s not the only survivor Charlotte meets. It’s a long walk to Hunt, filled
with those who lost everything and aren’t afraid to take whatever they can. It
will take both Charlotte and Arthur to get past survivors that threaten to take
their supplies, bodies, and lives.
A tale of the numbness and the hope humans can achieve in
the aftermath of atrocity, The Long and
Winding Road will appeal to all post-apocalyptic romance lovers from the
realm of The Hunger Games to that of Warm Bodies.
Pretty good pitch! Two small things I think you could fix - have "survivors who threaten to take their supplies, etc." instead of "survivors that etc," and there's something about the beginning of the very last sentence that seems a little off. I'd say, maybe chance "achieve" to "experience" or something similarly neutral. "Numbness" doesn't really seem like an "achievement." Other than that, it's awesome, and makes me all the more excited!
ReplyDeleteAbout the title, I think TL&WR works better than just TWR. It makes it sound, well, longer and windingier. XD
Thanks! Adjusted it and went back over it a few times before sending it in.
DeleteHaha, yeah. I'm just not sure how well the actual song is going to tie in with the original fiction version, since its Arthur is a fan of Psychotic Limeys instead of The Beatles. He could probably still be a fan of that song in particular, though...
I didn't even know it was the name of a song...
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